Do you think i have talent.. pls read an excerpt ;-)?

sorry but i wouldn't continue reading this story. you can't identify with any of the characters. no one is 'perfect'. a father wouldn't call his daughter a tar baby or say "She ain't nothing but a tar baby anyway, do your thang bro", while his brother molestated her. that doesn't happen in real life and it makes your story weaker. you gave out too much information about the characters and their personalities too soon and too bluntly. your story line isn't that great either- its a bit boring. sorry, just saying how i feel, maybe some other people like it